Time isn't an element
of significance when
I'm with you.
I erase it completely
as we stand silently
enclosed in eachothers eyes.
The smile you send me
is made my own.
The words we wish to say
are for some reason
lost inside ourselves.
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i love this piece. i've attempted myself to illustrate love with words and it seems you've captured a slight image. :]]
from the 'i erase it' line i'd eliminate the word silently. you already address it in your title. also, i'd try to form another ending. i felt like your poem ended too abruptly. like, end stream of thoughts.
but this is deff. gonna be a favesies of mine.
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